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Fading Light
addie slebodnik
From this holy place
My guiding light is dying
Upon my grave I lay my head
And sing through jaded crying
A thin tune slips from deep within
And floats upon the breeze
A song of haunting sorrow
Infesting souls with sweet disease
A song for the innocent
For the frail and for the old
For those whose dreams were out of reach
For those who dared to be so bold
A song for aging artists
A song for pompous priests
A song for simple workers
A song that will not cease
Through trial and test we will succeed
We relish in our pleasures
Yet there is pain in failure
That only morbid measures
Within my failure I have dwelled
For far too long it’s all I’ve seen
When hope fades, your soul is dying
By life and death I lie between
A poison surges through my veins
As hope fails, yet everlasting be
Upon angels or demons wings
Please bring peace to my eternity.
addie slebodnik
From this holy place
My guiding light is dying
Upon my grave I lay my head
And sing through jaded crying
A thin tune slips from deep within
And floats upon the breeze
A song of haunting sorrow
Infesting souls with sweet disease
A song for the innocent
For the frail and for the old
For those whose dreams were out of reach
For those who dared to be so bold
A song for aging artists
A song for pompous priests
A song for simple workers
A song that will not cease
Through trial and test we will succeed
We relish in our pleasures
Yet there is pain in failure
That only morbid measures
Within my failure I have dwelled
For far too long it’s all I’ve seen
When hope fades, your soul is dying
By life and death I lie between
A poison surges through my veins
As hope fails, yet everlasting be
Upon angels or demons wings
Please bring peace to my eternity.
I believe the poet inme is making a come back. It has been ages since i did a poem. For those of u who are new, i used to be strictly poetry on here. Anyways, I'm trying to think of how to descibe this poem...
first off, its in ABCBDEFE rhyme scheme and I tried to keep it at 7 /8 beats a line
This is about someone who is debating suicide (but in their hearts have already decided) what they are going to do.
The parts about the song are kinda an exampl of who the speaker is praying for or what they are reflecting, meories or ppl and such.
The 5th verses just mentions that everyone has success and failure somewhere in their life.
6th verses explains (a little) about why the speaker is depressed, that they seem to only fail and things will never get better is their way of thinking.
The poison can be veiwed on 2 standpoints.
1- the speaker literally poisoned themselves, or
2- the "poison" was the speakers corrupted thinking and distorted views about their life.
I guess I just want ppl to think of their success in life instead of always seeing the bad. I know I'm not a good role model for that idea, but failure isn't worth giving up.
I'm done with my morals speech now. If you still want to, go ahead and read, lol.
first off, its in ABCBDEFE rhyme scheme and I tried to keep it at 7 /8 beats a line
This is about someone who is debating suicide (but in their hearts have already decided) what they are going to do.
The parts about the song are kinda an exampl of who the speaker is praying for or what they are reflecting, meories or ppl and such.
The 5th verses just mentions that everyone has success and failure somewhere in their life.
6th verses explains (a little) about why the speaker is depressed, that they seem to only fail and things will never get better is their way of thinking.
The poison can be veiwed on 2 standpoints.
1- the speaker literally poisoned themselves, or
2- the "poison" was the speakers corrupted thinking and distorted views about their life.
I guess I just want ppl to think of their success in life instead of always seeing the bad. I know I'm not a good role model for that idea, but failure isn't worth giving up.
I'm done with my morals speech now. If you still want to, go ahead and read, lol.
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thanx 
actually, i thought it was kinda weak compared to the others, lol. but it's been awhile since i've written poetry. i actually started as a poet on DA and lately all I've submitted is drawings...wish u could download music on here, that would be really kewl
actually, i thought it was kinda weak compared to the others, lol. but it's been awhile since i've written poetry. i actually started as a poet on DA and lately all I've submitted is drawings...wish u could download music on here, that would be really kewl